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Dr Strum
post Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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It sucks \/

Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory


Told you.

I like cheese

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post Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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Arg.


Your links just don't like you, yo...

Use Myspace.




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post Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.


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post Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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Fixed


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post Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!


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post Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.

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post Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.


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post Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.


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And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'


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Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.


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So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT

oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time

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