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| tempest drake |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM ~~~  |
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| DragonKnight Jason |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 25 Joined: 9-December 06 Member No.: 347 |
Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. ~~~  |
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| untouch |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
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| elroid |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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Fixed
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| aerozero |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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Life Waster Group: Knights Posts: 750 Joined: 15-December 06 From: Somewhere Member No.: 363 |
Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
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| Rosetta |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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 Admiral Group: Flunkies Posts: 299 Joined: 23-December 05 From: Space Dreadnought "Nonna" Member No.: 3 |
seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
Thanks ~~~ Au.
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| Enexodia Forbiddensia |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 30 Joined: 12-July 07 From: Philippines Member No.: 1617 |
Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
~~~ Check out my art site sometimes ^_^
Why can't we have more Nessiah, Gulcasa and Roswell Love :( Milanor deserves it too... |
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| The Accursed |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 23 Joined: 7-March 06 Member No.: 81 |
...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
~~~ :Ein's Familiar, Rose:
You are sharp-tongued, witty, and just the person your friends want with them if they're in trouble. You present yourself as reliable and brimming with confidence, and it attracts you many loyal friends. |
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| Takeru-kun |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
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| San Aurora |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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 GOD IS DEAD Group: Sprites Posts: 162 Joined: 5-January 08 Member No.: 1681 |
Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
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| Antartique |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 22 Joined: 11-June 07 From: Alaska, South Pole O.O Member No.: 1490 |
So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* |
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