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| Rhiannon |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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 I'm really moved by the chicken bone  Group: Gods Posts: 2033 Joined: 23-December 05 From: Minnesotablarg Member No.: 4  |
It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM ~~~  |
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| MeleMewChew |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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 Bitchy Whore Group: Naughty Children Posts: 43 Joined: 11-January 06 Member No.: 42 |
Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. ~~~ GO GO EMO RANGERS YOU MIGHTY MOSHIN' EMO RANGERRRRS!
<MeleMewchew> Bitchy whore bleeding heart emo ranger power! |
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| VGK |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 16 Joined: 10-July 07 Member No.: 1615 |
I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
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| Mystic_Truhan |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 13 Joined: 26-January 06 Member No.: 53 |
Fixed
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| Takeru-kun |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 33 Joined: 27-December 05 Member No.: 24 |
Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
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| Vixen1977 |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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 Lazy Group: Magi Posts: 23 Joined: 23-December 05 From: Riviera, England Member No.: 8 |
seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
Thanks ~~~  Yes, that is me on the right wearing red. Who wants a cookie? |
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| Disaresta |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 14 Joined: 25-December 06 Member No.: 420 |
Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
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| Deadelus |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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 Talkative Group: Arcs Posts: 134 Joined: 8-February 06 From: In this galaxy Member No.: 63 |
...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
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| Rikane |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 20 Joined: 25-November 06 Member No.: 289 |
And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
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| Cosmo |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 1 Joined: 9-December 11 Member No.: 2629 |
Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
~~~ Dept. Heaven may be unnoticed, but it has very few haters as a result.
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| Someone |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 23 Joined: 7-December 06 Member No.: 335 |
So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* |
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