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| Frisk |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM |
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| Deamond |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 39 Joined: 19-June 06 From: Germany Member No.: 139 |
Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. |
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| kelia_zephyr |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 15 Joined: 12-January 07 From: Konali Member No.: 520 |
I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
~~~  Gentle winds of hope can stir even the most desolate of hearts... |
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| Kinsoku |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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Fixed
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| Bron |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 9 Joined: 30-April 10 From: Finland Member No.: 2055 |
Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
~~~  Yggdra..I don't know how to deal with girls who have been named after trees.. |
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| Desu |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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 デス Group: Arcs Posts: 250 Joined: 13-October 06 From: Singapore Member No.: 245 |
seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
Thanks ~~~  |
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| DavidSchinkel |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 42 Joined: 10-June 10 From: Gig Harbor, Washington Member No.: 2071 |
Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
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| Tonfa |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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 Casual Chatter Group: Arcs Posts: 91 Joined: 14-February 06 From: Finland Member No.: 67 |
...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
~~~ They say one should not speak unkindly of the dead, so I say "Nice try." - Lezard Valeth
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| AthenaWyrm |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
~~~ Yes.
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| Lite-Yoshi |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 20 Joined: 18-May 09 From: California, but not in the OC Member No.: 1886 |
Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
~~~ To be: The Guy-Play I Wanna Be The Guy, still awake-drink coffee, happy-party up, seen-stand up, heard-speak up, respected-shut up.
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| Shiokazu |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* ~~~  click to read. |
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