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> Wholly *****!!!!, AAAAHHHHH!!! Sand's first fanfic??!
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post Sep 19 2007, 09:55 AM
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Man, this is so embarrasing.....but I just try to *gasp* send my fic and hope to hear something from you guys. I'm still novice at writing long story, so I hope to hear what the veterans say. I know some people will hate me cause I duped Yggdra in this story....Oh and one more thing, do you think my fic will be rated as "M" or "T" ? Say it cause I really confuse right now..... Last but not least, I use a more easy to understand words because I want people to know what I'm writing about and also I'm still not perfect about words vocabulary.

NOOOO!!! MY FIRST FANFIC

I will be out from the net for a few days cause there are terribly mannnyy homeworks and projects to be done and send this week. Oh snap, gonna go now. Bonjour!!!


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post Sep 21 2007, 12:55 PM
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one word, willies!!!.
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post Sep 25 2007, 12:37 PM
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*sarcasm* Cool!! Only my classmates read my story... *sarcasm*
AAHHH!! E.T.A 2 WEEKS TO EXAMINATIONS!!!!
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post Sep 25 2007, 08:24 PM
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Guess you seem to think that people only read stories if they leave reviews. I hate people that do that.


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post Sep 26 2007, 07:04 AM
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Not really....but if you all can, please leave some comment okay? I'm sorry if I a bit rude to you all.....


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post Sep 29 2007, 02:53 AM
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Okay... It's going to be harsh, but it's going to be the truth.

I tried, but I wasn't able to read it fully.

First, you started with an OC that came out fo nowhere and who already had good relations with people on different sides...

Also, I couldn't even guess when in Yggdra Union is this fic... After, during, or before... And then, why is everybody alive...

Also, the text shouldn't all be in bold...

I would suggest to go read some fics and theirs reviews and get an idea of what is considered good and bad.

A good point, at least, is that the length is good.

Frankly, this fic is bad. But I'm sure you can get better. You just need more knowledge and practice of what you're doing.


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post Oct 2 2007, 11:38 AM
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Oh yeah....That story doesn't relate to YU actual story, so I make all the guys alive, even the bad guys. This is my first experimental fanfiction, so I know there would be many grammatical mistakes lingering out there.....I wil fix it later because I'm now studying for the exam next week.

Thanks for the tips Megaolix, I will change the font into normal then....
Don't worry, I will tell you all what's the original story after the exam, because I've working out on my second fic, probably the longest I've ever make. Many people confused why all the guy seems nice right? I know this will happen but after the second fiction comes out, you all will know it.

Just think the first fiction as a beta test. Just say any comments whether good or bad to this post, I will answer it AFTER the exam okay, thanks and good day! Roger out....
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post Oct 2 2007, 08:29 PM
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I hate those stories where everyone is alive for no apparent reason, bending reality and shitting all over the storyline established by the game. Feral does a lot of this, too.

A good word of advice - Aside from the silly fangirls who obsess over impossible pairings, generally fanfiction which doesn't alter an already-established storyline is taken better.
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post Oct 6 2007, 02:10 AM
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Remember, a good judge does not speak with bias, or even refer to themself. they judge a fic for MATERIAL, GRAMMAR, and PLOT not OPINION and BASELESS CONJECTURE!
It wasn't that bad, but... Damn, my eyes are bleeding.
plus, AU stories are perfectly reasonable jumples of fanon.
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post Oct 6 2007, 02:25 AM
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Not when they undo what a storyline does.


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post Oct 6 2007, 02:35 AM
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what I like to classify this sort of thing as:Alternate Universe Fanon.


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post Oct 6 2007, 02:36 AM
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Most AU sucks. Try to prove otherwise.


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post Oct 6 2007, 02:39 AM
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I see no point in doing so. It's up to the author to at least make it decent. To do that, they need reviews. not stuff like "I liked it" but stuf like "XXX is YYY, and therefore ZZZ and contradicts VVV. Perhaps you should rework this for WWW." and the like.
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post Oct 6 2007, 02:41 AM
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I'm not talking about authors. I'm talking about general AU fanfiction. And again, I challenge you to prove otherwise.


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post Oct 6 2007, 02:44 AM
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Challenged denied, unfortunately, good AU is impossible to find for the sake of showing to a critic like yourself. It, like other interesing, useful, or otherwise positive things n life, is usually found when one isn'tlooking for anything in particular.


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