 Wholly *****!!!!, AAAAHHHHH!!! Sand's first fanfic??! |
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| WhiteKnight |
  Sep 19 2007, 09:55 AM
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 *obnoxiousaltcaps*  Group: Arcs Posts: 304 Joined: 10-April 07 From: SOMEWHERE NOT UPSTATE NEW YORK Member No.: 1010  |
Man, this is so embarrasing.....but I just try to *gasp* send my fic and hope to hear something from you guys. I'm still novice at writing long story, so I hope to hear what the veterans say. I know some people will hate me cause I duped Yggdra in this story....Oh and one more thing, do you think my fic will be rated as "M" or "T" ? Say it cause I really confuse right now..... Last but not least, I use a more easy to understand words because I want people to know what I'm writing about and also I'm still not perfect about words vocabulary.
NOOOO!!! MY FIRST FANFIC I will be out from the net for a few days cause there are terribly mannnyy homeworks and projects to be done and send this week. Oh snap, gonna go now. Bonjour!!! ~~~ Yar har ho.
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| Yourself |
Sep 21 2007, 12:55 PM
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 Twilight Gospel Group: Arcs Posts: 245 Joined: 27-December 05 From: The Closet Member No.: 25 |
one word, willies!!!.
~~~ How would you like your "keen" eye to watch my "sure" foot kick your "smart" ass? - Xaldin, KH2 parody
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| Hayate |
 Sep 25 2007, 12:37 PM
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 Nerd nerd nerd Group: Flunkies Posts: 340 Joined: 14-February 08 From: The Battleground Member No.: 1697 |
*sarcasm* Cool!! Only my classmates read my story... *sarcasm*
AAHHH!! E.T.A 2 WEEKS TO EXAMINATIONS!!!! *Stressed Guy.jpg* ~~~ Two wrongs don't make a right, but three rights make a left.
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| Rosetta |
Sep 25 2007, 08:24 PM
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 Admiral Group: Flunkies Posts: 299 Joined: 23-December 05 From: Space Dreadnought "Nonna" Member No.: 3 |
Guess you seem to think that people only read stories if they leave reviews. I hate people that do that.
~~~ Au.
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| Chardes |
Sep 26 2007, 07:04 AM
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 Talkative Group: Arcs Posts: 105 Joined: 27-December 05 From: Void of stalking-ness. Member No.: 26 |
Not really....but if you all can, please leave some comment okay? I'm sorry if I a bit rude to you all.....
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| zesler |
Sep 29 2007, 02:53 AM
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 Casual Chatter Group: Arcs Posts: 74 Joined: 25-June 07 Member No.: 1579 |
Okay... It's going to be harsh, but it's going to be the truth.
I tried, but I wasn't able to read it fully. First, you started with an OC that came out fo nowhere and who already had good relations with people on different sides... Also, I couldn't even guess when in Yggdra Union is this fic... After, during, or before... And then, why is everybody alive... Also, the text shouldn't all be in bold... I would suggest to go read some fics and theirs reviews and get an idea of what is considered good and bad. A good point, at least, is that the length is good. Frankly, this fic is bad. But I'm sure you can get better. You just need more knowledge and practice of what you're doing. ~~~ "If it is possible to manipulate this thread, then it will be possible to control everything in the world." -Luminous Arc
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| Martel |
Oct 2 2007, 11:38 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 37 Joined: 6-May 06 Member No.: 118 |
Oh yeah....That story doesn't relate to YU actual story, so I make all the guys alive, even the bad guys. This is my first experimental fanfiction, so I know there would be many grammatical mistakes lingering out there.....I wil fix it later because I'm now studying for the exam next week.
Thanks for the tips Megaolix, I will change the font into normal then.... Don't worry, I will tell you all what's the original story after the exam, because I've working out on my second fic, probably the longest I've ever make. Many people confused why all the guy seems nice right? I know this will happen but after the second fiction comes out, you all will know it. Just think the first fiction as a beta test. Just say any comments whether good or bad to this post, I will answer it AFTER the exam okay, thanks and good day! Roger out.... ~~~ "What was his name again? Midale?" - When one does not remember Milanor's name.
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| onyhow |
Oct 2 2007, 08:29 PM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 7 Joined: 23-March 10 Member No.: 2043 |
I hate those stories where everyone is alive for no apparent reason, bending reality and shitting all over the storyline established by the game. Feral does a lot of this, too.
A good word of advice - Aside from the silly fangirls who obsess over impossible pairings, generally fanfiction which doesn't alter an already-established storyline is taken better. |
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| Marionette |
Oct 6 2007, 02:10 AM
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 The Comedy of Errors Group: Knights Posts: 615 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Puerto Rico Member No.: 11 |
Remember, a good judge does not speak with bias, or even refer to themself. they judge a fic for MATERIAL, GRAMMAR, and PLOT not OPINION and BASELESS CONJECTURE!
It wasn't that bad, but... Damn, my eyes are bleeding. plus, AU stories are perfectly reasonable jumples of fanon. ~~~   |
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| Disaresta |
Oct 6 2007, 02:25 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 14 Joined: 25-December 06 Member No.: 420 |
Not when they undo what a storyline does.
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| Sajo |
Oct 6 2007, 02:35 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 21 Joined: 7-January 06 From: VA, USA Member No.: 39 |
what I like to classify this sort of thing as:Alternate Universe Fanon.
~~~  :The Solitary Angel, Ledah: You are quiet and reserved though your love of solitude doesn't keep you from making contact with others. Not given to sharing aspects of your personal life and history, you value loyalty above all else and present a very sophisticated and cultured, if remote, front. <br><br><a title="Take this quiz at Quizilla" href="http://www.quizilla.com/redirect.php?statsid=57&url=http://quizilla.com/users/Stroud-chan/quizzes/Which%20Riviera%3A%20The%20Promised%20Land%20character%20are%20you%3F"> Which Riviera: The Promised Land character are you?</a><BR> <font size="-2">brought to you by <a title="Quiz, Horoscope, Flash Games, Poems - Quizilla!" href="http://www.quizilla.com/redirect.php?statsid=56&url=http://www.quizilla.com">Quizilla</a></font> |
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| AzureDemon |
Oct 6 2007, 02:36 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 16 Joined: 23-September 08 Member No.: 1785 |
Most AU sucks. Try to prove otherwise.
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| Mystic_Truhan |
Oct 6 2007, 02:39 AM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 13 Joined: 26-January 06 Member No.: 53 |
I see no point in doing so. It's up to the author to at least make it decent. To do that, they need reviews. not stuff like "I liked it" but stuf like "XXX is YYY, and therefore ZZZ and contradicts VVV. Perhaps you should rework this for WWW." and the like.
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| tempest drake |
Oct 6 2007, 02:41 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 36 Joined: 9-May 09 Member No.: 1879 |
I'm not talking about authors. I'm talking about general AU fanfiction. And again, I challenge you to prove otherwise.
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| Raijinili |
Oct 6 2007, 02:44 AM
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 Lieutenant Group: Gods Posts: 2539 Joined: 25-December 05 Member No.: 16 |
Challenged denied, unfortunately, good AU is impossible to find for the sake of showing to a critic like yourself. It, like other interesing, useful, or otherwise positive things n life, is usually found when one isn'tlooking for anything in particular.
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