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| Swordmaster |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 11 Joined: 19-June 09 Member No.: 1908  |
It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM |
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| forsakensmile |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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 Shy  Group: Arcs Posts: 40 Joined: 24-December 05 Member No.: 12 |
Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. |
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| Xel |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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 Casual Chatter Group: Arcs Posts: 50 Joined: 24-February 07 From: Brazil Member No.: 715 |
I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
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| Wally |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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 Talkative Group: Arcs Posts: 130 Joined: 18-January 06 From: Ontario Member No.: 47 |
Fixed
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| Swifty-chan |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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 Zzzz... Group: Knights Posts: 469 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Netherworld Member No.: 13 |
Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
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| Desu |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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 デス Group: Arcs Posts: 250 Joined: 13-October 06 From: Singapore Member No.: 245 |
seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
Thanks ~~~  |
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| Malice |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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 NUMERO NINO Group: Grim Angels Posts: 339 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Canadia :D Member No.: 9 |
Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
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| Liger |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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 something off-color and witty Group: Flunkies Posts: 321 Joined: 26-December 05 Member No.: 21 |
...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
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| Blackbelt |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 9 Joined: 23-November 08 Member No.: 1814 |
And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
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| MoloMowChow |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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 I have a bitch for a twin sister. That means I'm a stupid fu Group: Naughty Children Posts: 103 Joined: 1-January 06 From: Whoreville Member No.: 35 |
Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
~~~ im a moran who takes the internet too seriusly and got banned becuz my sister was a bitch :(
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| Lloyd Seegymont the Rasier |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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 Keeping the forum afloat Group: Knights Posts: 1438 Joined: 22-December 06 From: Bayliss Member No.: 392 |
So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* ~~~ blues477 (10:29:38 AM): found you
(10:29:40 AM): you motherfucker LoRdXrAsLeR(10:29:48 AM): D: (10:29:54 AM): NO DON'T |
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