 Wholly *****!!!!, AAAAHHHHH!!! Sand's first fanfic??! |
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| FlameSpark |
  Sep 19 2007, 09:55 AM
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 Talkative  Group: Arcs Posts: 140 Joined: 5-April 07 From: Wandering aimlessly... Member No.: 978  |
Man, this is so embarrasing.....but I just try to *gasp* send my fic and hope to hear something from you guys. I'm still novice at writing long story, so I hope to hear what the veterans say. I know some people will hate me cause I duped Yggdra in this story....Oh and one more thing, do you think my fic will be rated as "M" or "T" ? Say it cause I really confuse right now..... Last but not least, I use a more easy to understand words because I want people to know what I'm writing about and also I'm still not perfect about words vocabulary.
NOOOO!!! MY FIRST FANFIC I will be out from the net for a few days cause there are terribly mannnyy homeworks and projects to be done and send this week. Oh snap, gonna go now. Bonjour!!! ~~~  |
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| Elnendil |
Sep 21 2007, 12:55 PM
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 Talkative Group: Arcs Posts: 154 Joined: 23-December 05 From: DEM STATES Member No.: 6 |
one word, willies!!!.
~~~ QUOTE Kenji: Where else would I could get beaten with a phone that would make me unable to remember it? The ass? |
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| Malice |
 Sep 25 2007, 12:37 PM
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 NUMERO NINO Group: Grim Angels Posts: 339 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Canadia :D Member No.: 9 |
*sarcasm* Cool!! Only my classmates read my story... *sarcasm*
AAHHH!! E.T.A 2 WEEKS TO EXAMINATIONS!!!! *Stressed Guy.jpg* |
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| Irysa |
Sep 25 2007, 08:24 PM
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 Towards some blank infinity Group: Knights Posts: 1470 Joined: 12-February 06 From: Behind You Member No.: 65 |
Guess you seem to think that people only read stories if they leave reviews. I hate people that do that.
~~~ [13:27:43] [Sabator] peter would be the worst batman ever though. "turn on the bat-signal" "right!" *turns on huge foglight, beams an image of striped pantsu into the sky*
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| Carnivorous Sheep |
Sep 26 2007, 07:04 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 19 Joined: 20-July 06 Member No.: 172 |
Not really....but if you all can, please leave some comment okay? I'm sorry if I a bit rude to you all.....
~~~ "Though always keen and eager the sheepdog never really mastered the herding of carnivorous sheep."
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| Bass EX |
Sep 29 2007, 02:53 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 18 Joined: 18-January 08 From: Hangar 18 Member No.: 1686 |
Okay... It's going to be harsh, but it's going to be the truth.
I tried, but I wasn't able to read it fully. First, you started with an OC that came out fo nowhere and who already had good relations with people on different sides... Also, I couldn't even guess when in Yggdra Union is this fic... After, during, or before... And then, why is everybody alive... Also, the text shouldn't all be in bold... I would suggest to go read some fics and theirs reviews and get an idea of what is considered good and bad. A good point, at least, is that the length is good. Frankly, this fic is bad. But I'm sure you can get better. You just need more knowledge and practice of what you're doing. ~~~ There are two words that will open up many doors for you: 'Pull' and 'Push'. |
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| Ruby Eyes Yuan |
Oct 2 2007, 11:38 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 12 Joined: 29-November 06 From: Somewhere In Riviera Member No.: 301 |
Oh yeah....That story doesn't relate to YU actual story, so I make all the guys alive, even the bad guys. This is my first experimental fanfiction, so I know there would be many grammatical mistakes lingering out there.....I wil fix it later because I'm now studying for the exam next week.
Thanks for the tips Megaolix, I will change the font into normal then.... Don't worry, I will tell you all what's the original story after the exam, because I've working out on my second fic, probably the longest I've ever make. Many people confused why all the guy seems nice right? I know this will happen but after the second fiction comes out, you all will know it. Just think the first fiction as a beta test. Just say any comments whether good or bad to this post, I will answer it AFTER the exam okay, thanks and good day! Roger out.... ~~~ "I am well aware of the legacy the Grim Angels created, but it is not the kind of life I desire." - Yuan; Ruby and Crimson (A Riviera Fanfiction)
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| Ryouji |
Oct 2 2007, 08:29 PM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 2 Joined: 16-March 10 Member No.: 2041 |
I hate those stories where everyone is alive for no apparent reason, bending reality and shitting all over the storyline established by the game. Feral does a lot of this, too.
A good word of advice - Aside from the silly fangirls who obsess over impossible pairings, generally fanfiction which doesn't alter an already-established storyline is taken better. ~~~ If the apple never falls far from the tree......what happens if the tree's on a hill?
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| Flamberge |
Oct 6 2007, 02:10 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 13 Joined: 5-August 06 Member No.: 182 |
Remember, a good judge does not speak with bias, or even refer to themself. they judge a fic for MATERIAL, GRAMMAR, and PLOT not OPINION and BASELESS CONJECTURE!
It wasn't that bad, but... Damn, my eyes are bleeding. plus, AU stories are perfectly reasonable jumples of fanon. ~~~  |
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| Ryu2 |
Oct 6 2007, 02:25 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 29 Joined: 5-December 06 Member No.: 326 |
Not when they undo what a storyline does.
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| CATGUN |
Oct 6 2007, 02:35 AM
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 Petty Officer Group: Sprites Posts: 253 Joined: 26-September 07 From: MALAYSIA Member No.: 1650 |
what I like to classify this sort of thing as:Alternate Universe Fanon.
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| Liger |
Oct 6 2007, 02:36 AM
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 something off-color and witty Group: Flunkies Posts: 321 Joined: 26-December 05 Member No.: 21 |
Most AU sucks. Try to prove otherwise.
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| smarttman |
Oct 6 2007, 02:39 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 18 Joined: 30-April 07 Member No.: 1178 |
I see no point in doing so. It's up to the author to at least make it decent. To do that, they need reviews. not stuff like "I liked it" but stuf like "XXX is YYY, and therefore ZZZ and contradicts VVV. Perhaps you should rework this for WWW." and the like.
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| Dr Strum |
Oct 6 2007, 02:41 AM
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 Can Lead the Nation with a Microphone Group: Angels Posts: 5427 Joined: 23-December 05 From: Seattle Member No.: 1 |
I'm not talking about authors. I'm talking about general AU fanfiction. And again, I challenge you to prove otherwise.
~~~ Писатель всегда будет в оппозиции к политике, пока сама политика будет в оппозиции к культуре.
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| Midnight |
Oct 6 2007, 02:44 AM
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 et Omnia Vanitas Group: Flunkies Posts: 296 Joined: 2-July 08 From: Minnesota Member No.: 1755 |
Challenged denied, unfortunately, good AU is impossible to find for the sake of showing to a critic like yourself. It, like other interesing, useful, or otherwise positive things n life, is usually found when one isn'tlooking for anything in particular.
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