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| Violently Happy |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM ~~~ be happy! Violently....
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| Nanashi |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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 Fenrisulfr  Group: Arcs Posts: 286 Joined: 5-February 06 From: Millington, TN Member No.: 61 |
Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. |
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| Bron |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
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| Midnight |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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 et Omnia Vanitas Group: Flunkies Posts: 296 Joined: 2-July 08 From: Minnesota Member No.: 1755 |
Fixed
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| Malice no Kokushi |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
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| Lloyd Seegymont the Rasier |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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 Keeping the forum afloat Group: Knights Posts: 1438 Joined: 22-December 06 From: Bayliss Member No.: 392 |
seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
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| Lite-Yoshi |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
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| sandpenguin |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
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| flunky1412 |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
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| Antartique |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
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| Gaggy |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* ~~~  |
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