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| Sajo |
  Sep 19 2007, 09:55 AM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 21 Joined: 7-January 06 From: VA, USA Member No.: 39  |
Man, this is so embarrasing.....but I just try to *gasp* send my fic and hope to hear something from you guys. I'm still novice at writing long story, so I hope to hear what the veterans say. I know some people will hate me cause I duped Yggdra in this story....Oh and one more thing, do you think my fic will be rated as "M" or "T" ? Say it cause I really confuse right now..... Last but not least, I use a more easy to understand words because I want people to know what I'm writing about and also I'm still not perfect about words vocabulary.
NOOOO!!! MY FIRST FANFIC I will be out from the net for a few days cause there are terribly mannnyy homeworks and projects to be done and send this week. Oh snap, gonna go now. Bonjour!!! ~~~  :The Solitary Angel, Ledah: You are quiet and reserved though your love of solitude doesn't keep you from making contact with others. Not given to sharing aspects of your personal life and history, you value loyalty above all else and present a very sophisticated and cultured, if remote, front. <br><br><a title="Take this quiz at Quizilla" href="http://www.quizilla.com/redirect.php?statsid=57&url=http://quizilla.com/users/Stroud-chan/quizzes/Which%20Riviera%3A%20The%20Promised%20Land%20character%20are%20you%3F"> Which Riviera: The Promised Land character are you?</a><BR> <font size="-2">brought to you by <a title="Quiz, Horoscope, Flash Games, Poems - Quizilla!" href="http://www.quizilla.com/redirect.php?statsid=56&url=http://www.quizilla.com">Quizilla</a></font> |
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| Lite-Yoshi |
Sep 21 2007, 12:55 PM
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 Lazy Group: Arcs Posts: 20 Joined: 18-May 09 From: California, but not in the OC Member No.: 1886 |
one word, willies!!!.
~~~ To be: The Guy-Play I Wanna Be The Guy, still awake-drink coffee, happy-party up, seen-stand up, heard-speak up, respected-shut up.
Recent Feats: + Games: - Completed Ys SEVEN (Normal, Lv. 61 average, 23:47 in-game time) Now waiting for: - Ys I & II Chronicles US Localization (confirmed date on February 15, 2011) - FEAR 3 and Portal 2 (coming April 2011) |
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| jcdietz03 |
 Sep 25 2007, 12:37 PM
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Time Waster  Group: Flunkies Posts: 339 Joined: 1-July 07 From: Boston Member No.: 1609 |
*sarcasm* Cool!! Only my classmates read my story... *sarcasm*
AAHHH!! E.T.A 2 WEEKS TO EXAMINATIONS!!!! *Stressed Guy.jpg* |
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| Lloyd Seegymont the Rasier |
Sep 25 2007, 08:24 PM
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 Keeping the forum afloat Group: Knights Posts: 1438 Joined: 22-December 06 From: Bayliss Member No.: 392 |
Guess you seem to think that people only read stories if they leave reviews. I hate people that do that.
~~~ blues477 (10:29:38 AM): found you
(10:29:40 AM): you motherfucker LoRdXrAsLeR(10:29:48 AM): D: (10:29:54 AM): NO DON'T |
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| MoloMowChow |
Sep 26 2007, 07:04 AM
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 I have a bitch for a twin sister. That means I'm a stupid fu Group: Naughty Children Posts: 103 Joined: 1-January 06 From: Whoreville Member No.: 35 |
Not really....but if you all can, please leave some comment okay? I'm sorry if I a bit rude to you all.....
~~~ im a moran who takes the internet too seriusly and got banned becuz my sister was a bitch :(
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| Mr. Sirius |
Sep 29 2007, 02:53 AM
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 Casual Chatter Group: Arcs Posts: 56 Joined: 1-March 08 Member No.: 1702 |
Okay... It's going to be harsh, but it's going to be the truth.
I tried, but I wasn't able to read it fully. First, you started with an OC that came out fo nowhere and who already had good relations with people on different sides... Also, I couldn't even guess when in Yggdra Union is this fic... After, during, or before... And then, why is everybody alive... Also, the text shouldn't all be in bold... I would suggest to go read some fics and theirs reviews and get an idea of what is considered good and bad. A good point, at least, is that the length is good. Frankly, this fic is bad. But I'm sure you can get better. You just need more knowledge and practice of what you're doing. |
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| Sotel Kiseki |
Oct 2 2007, 11:38 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 35 Joined: 19-January 07 Member No.: 555 |
Oh yeah....That story doesn't relate to YU actual story, so I make all the guys alive, even the bad guys. This is my first experimental fanfiction, so I know there would be many grammatical mistakes lingering out there.....I wil fix it later because I'm now studying for the exam next week.
Thanks for the tips Megaolix, I will change the font into normal then.... Don't worry, I will tell you all what's the original story after the exam, because I've working out on my second fic, probably the longest I've ever make. Many people confused why all the guy seems nice right? I know this will happen but after the second fiction comes out, you all will know it. Just think the first fiction as a beta test. Just say any comments whether good or bad to this post, I will answer it AFTER the exam okay, thanks and good day! Roger out.... ~~~  |
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| regruBgniK |
Oct 2 2007, 08:29 PM
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 Metroid Queen Group: Arcs Posts: 314 Joined: 24-December 05 From: South Member No.: 14 |
I hate those stories where everyone is alive for no apparent reason, bending reality and shitting all over the storyline established by the game. Feral does a lot of this, too.
A good word of advice - Aside from the silly fangirls who obsess over impossible pairings, generally fanfiction which doesn't alter an already-established storyline is taken better. ~~~ What goes around...
Comes around... |
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| MARIA IRL |
Oct 6 2007, 02:10 AM
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 Therapist Group: Arcs Posts: 32 Joined: 27-October 08 From: Gropecunt Lane Member No.: 1804 |
Remember, a good judge does not speak with bias, or even refer to themself. they judge a fic for MATERIAL, GRAMMAR, and PLOT not OPINION and BASELESS CONJECTURE!
It wasn't that bad, but... Damn, my eyes are bleeding. plus, AU stories are perfectly reasonable jumples of fanon. ~~~ GODDAMMIT IT'S ATMA  THERE ARE BUGS IN HERE I KNOW IT | I'M LOOKING FOR BUGS IN YOUR HAIR SERIOUSLY I'M STARVING | MAYBE THEY'RE IN YOUR EAR |
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| valkan |
Oct 6 2007, 02:25 AM
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Vivec Group: Knights Posts: 646 Joined: 23-December 05 Member No.: 5 |
Not when they undo what a storyline does.
~~~ "Wheels within wheels..."
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| paperweight |
Oct 6 2007, 02:35 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 38 Joined: 15-August 06 Member No.: 192 |
what I like to classify this sort of thing as:Alternate Universe Fanon.
~~~ It's all a dream. Yeah... just a dream.
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| mindthinker |
Oct 6 2007, 02:36 AM
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Casual Chatter Group: Arcs Posts: 56 Joined: 14-August 07 From: in you head............. Member No.: 1636 |
Most AU sucks. Try to prove otherwise.
~~~ fi uoy cna raed hits, ouy indm si sa amse sa mndi.
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| DragonKnight Jason |
Oct 6 2007, 02:39 AM
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 Shy Group: Arcs Posts: 25 Joined: 9-December 06 Member No.: 347 |
I see no point in doing so. It's up to the author to at least make it decent. To do that, they need reviews. not stuff like "I liked it" but stuf like "XXX is YYY, and therefore ZZZ and contradicts VVV. Perhaps you should rework this for WWW." and the like.
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| Megafreak |
Oct 6 2007, 02:41 AM
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 Casual Chatter Group: Arcs Posts: 66 Joined: 1-December 06 From: In that little room for insane people.... Member No.: 308 |
I'm not talking about authors. I'm talking about general AU fanfiction. And again, I challenge you to prove otherwise.
~~~ What really happened.....
Milanor: Well, you're a pretty one. What are- Yggdra: Jerk! *slap* Me deviatnart account --> http://slimemush.deviantart.com/ |
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| Swifty-chan |
Oct 6 2007, 02:44 AM
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 Zzzz... Group: Knights Posts: 469 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Netherworld Member No.: 13 |
Challenged denied, unfortunately, good AU is impossible to find for the sake of showing to a critic like yourself. It, like other interesing, useful, or otherwise positive things n life, is usually found when one isn'tlooking for anything in particular.
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