An idea, I think, will most likely die out after a couple days...or weeks Options

[Raijinili]

Well...I was thinking of what would happen if Ledah had been poofed from Heaven's Gate instead of Ein. (This Idea may probably have been used already..but it's the only thing I can think of right now)

Just wondering if anyone thinks It might fit with the general storyline of the game. (Defeating accursed, meeting girls...killing monsters etc.) I was wondering what Ledah would do instead of Ein in...the random situations (WWLD?)

Just want to get input befofre I try to take on random fanfic Idea

(This will probably be my first fanfic...so I don't want to screw up...too much anyway)

-Dusty

This post has been edited by DustyHaru: Sep 3 2007, 09:18 PM

[Raijinili]

I want to help you because I think you have potential.

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First of all, why would Ursula pick Ledah? Through a mistake? Because she thought Ein would not be able to stumble through on his own, and wanted Ledah to be influenced by the Sprites?

Second, what is he like without his memories? Would he try to help Elendia for the first chapter, and go to Rosalina? Would his lack of emotion include his sympathy? What would he do to get his memories back? Would he even BE at the village?

Third, it's obvious that Ledah is an angel, unlike Ein. Would he know what an angel is? Would the others think he was a demon, or an Arc? But the Arcs have bat wings, while Ledah has bird wings.

Without his memories, would he feel how important Lorelei is to him? Would he allow himself to use other weapons?

This post has been edited by Raijinili: Sep 4 2007, 05:26 AM

[Raijinili]

thanks, I already thought about some of those points...but I think I'll work around them somehow...

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1. Was Ein chosen at first? No, the fairies thought he was going to die. Therfore, I believe that Ursula picked at random. Of course feel free to show me proof that it wasn't. Where Ein was Pure of Heart, Ledah would be emotionless, and would not disobey orders (inner Conflict?). So if Ursula were to remove his memories, as she did to Ein, He might change (or would have conflicting thoughts to following Ursula or Hector). And it would be pretty funny to see ArchAngel pwnted by Lost Seraph etc.

2. Instead of Sypathy let's say he's motivated by his lack of memories.
Or Rather, his wanting to learn who he is.

3. He starts to question who he is, what his purpose is; etc.

Turning away from the two girls, he raised his face to the frosty, moonlit air and whispered, "What am I?"

This would be after they tell him about the Arcs, having bat wings; Wheras he has bird wings. Maybe they'd mistake him for someone like Ladie?

If that doesn't work I'll change the basic plot to fit Ledah in somehow

I just wonder what I'm going to do with Ein...

-Dusty

I'm trying to make synonyms of the chapter descriptions.
(ie. Angelic Advent is now Seraphic Dawn. And Pursuit of Truth is well...I'll figure them out later :P)

Still Need to figure out the title...maybe after I started dedicating more time to it It'll come to me

This post has been edited by DustyHaru: Sep 4 2007, 03:23 PM

[Raijinili]

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"Turning away from the two girls, he raised his face to the frosty, moonlit air and whispered, "What am I?"

That sounds like despair, an emotion. Be more careful when writing about emotionless characters.

This post has been edited by Raijinili: Sep 5 2007, 04:49 AM