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| Raijinili |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM ~~~  |
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| Raijinili |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. ~~~ |
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| Raijinili |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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Lieutenant Group: Gods Posts: 2539 Joined: 25-December 05 Member No.: 16 |
I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
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| Raijinili |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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Fixed
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| Raijinili |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
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| Raijinili |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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Lieutenant Group: Gods Posts: 2539 Joined: 25-December 05 Member No.: 16 |
seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
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| Raijinili |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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Lieutenant Group: Gods Posts: 2539 Joined: 25-December 05 Member No.: 16 |
Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
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| Raijinili |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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Lieutenant Group: Gods Posts: 2539 Joined: 25-December 05 Member No.: 16 |
...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
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| Raijinili |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
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| Raijinili |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
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| Raijinili |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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Lieutenant Group: Gods Posts: 2539 Joined: 25-December 05 Member No.: 16 |
So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* ~~~ |
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