Need some help, For correcting a new story Options

[Megaolix]

Like the topic title suggest, I finally finished writing the first chapter of a new story.

However, english isn't my first language and I'm sure the chapter I just wrote has many grammar mistakes.

Thus, I ask if someone could find those mistakes and tell me how to correct them.

The fic is a Makai Kingdom fic. I think it would be better if someone who know the game help me, since they won't get lost in the story, but I won't refuse any help.

Edit: Well... Look like I'll go ask somewhere else. Thanks anyway for those who considered it.

This post has been edited by Megaolix: Oct 5 2006, 10:59 PM