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| Angelic Chao§ |
  Jun 15 2006, 06:36 PM
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It sucks \/
Chapters 1-3 Ascention's Eve, Day of Ascention and Eternal Glory Told you. I like cheese This post has been edited by Angelic Chao§: Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM |
 
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| valkan |
Jun 16 2006, 03:48 AM
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Vivec  Group: Knights Posts: 646 Joined: 23-December 05 Member No.: 5 |
Arg.
Your links just don't like you, yo... Use Myspace. ~~~ "Wheels within wheels..."
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| Swifty-chan |
Jun 16 2006, 04:59 AM
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Zzzz... Group: Knights Posts: 469 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Netherworld Member No.: 13 |
I don't think it's a proper link aaaand I can't seem to open it.
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| Angelic Chao§ |
Jun 16 2006, 06:44 PM
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Fixed
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| Greifer |
Jun 16 2006, 09:57 PM
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Baby Chocobo Cuteness Group: Arcs Posts: 420 Joined: 7-April 06 From: Underground Member No.: 105 |
Interesting. I like how you did the backstory of Archangel. Anyway, you should keep writing to get better and uhm...oh yeah, use more descriptive words for your chracter's moods. Other than that, totally friggin awesome!!
~~~ I once saw Phoenix Wright cosplay at JACON...
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| Angelic Chao§ |
Jun 17 2006, 10:30 PM
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seriously it was good? i also have been working on a thing about the story behind chapter 8 for a while, and I'll keep your suggestion in mind.
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| Greifer |
Jun 18 2006, 02:14 AM
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Baby Chocobo Cuteness Group: Arcs Posts: 420 Joined: 7-April 06 From: Underground Member No.: 105 |
Yeah, use big words like these: nonchalant, impetuous, uhm...exuburent and other words.
~~~ I once saw Phoenix Wright cosplay at JACON...
I thought my eyes would shrivel up. |
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| Rhiannon |
Jun 18 2006, 02:37 AM
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I'm really moved by the chicken bone Group: Gods Posts: 2033 Joined: 23-December 05 From: Minnesotablarg Member No.: 4 |
...longer words don't mean better. Just expand your vocabulary. It helps prevent word repetition.
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| Swifty-chan |
Jun 18 2006, 03:13 AM
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Zzzz... Group: Knights Posts: 469 Joined: 24-December 05 From: Netherworld Member No.: 13 |
And prevents you from becoming a broken record ^^... somewhat ^^'
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| ChefMKT |
Jun 18 2006, 06:38 AM
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whoosh Group: Knights Posts: 606 Joined: 23-February 06 From: Australia Member No.: 73 |
Indeed, I've hit that same problem in my fanfic too. <.< I'D LIKE YOU SEE ANY OF YOU TRY TO DESCRIBE FOOD WITHOUT SOUNDING LIKE A BROKEN RECORD.
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| Angelic Chao§ |
Jun 19 2006, 04:13 PM
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So, you're still one of the best FanFic writers on here, MKT
oh yeah I'll sstart using bigger words starting...at this present time Pneumoniaultramicroscopicsiliconivolcaniconiosis. *Brain shorts out* |
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