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Posted by: H. Tsukiyono Sep 6 2007, 03:18 AM

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3766966/1/Dearly_Beloved

A chronicle of Various Happenings in Prince Ein's life, including Hiding from Rose and Dodging Matrimony. And then of course there's A Certain Blonde Knight.


This is probably the most trite and verbose "love story" you'll ever see outside of the field of Victorian prose. Sadly, it's not even funny. I think. Anyway, I'm putting it up solely for the purpose of getting it looked at (and potentially ripped apart), since I know there's plenty wrong with it. I wrote it on the premise of "Oh, it's an alternate universe, so of course Certain Riviera-Plot Related Events will not have happened, such as A Certain Sacrifice One Particular Character Makes." Thus somebody will be terrifically out of character. Yikes.

I don't write enough taciturn people. I need to practice. And I might not even have put it up here, but I'm a review wh0re and the potential for feedback got the better of me. ;_;

Posted by: DustyHaru Sep 6 2007, 11:55 PM

I thought "you beautiful idiots" was pretty funny (since I've heard it used to describe me). Then it again it might be just me who thinks it funny.

-Dusty

Posted by: H. Tsukiyono Sep 7 2007, 06:34 AM

... It was sort of supposed to be part of a serious moment, but hey. If it's humorous to somebody, then by all means let it be. Humor seems to be a redeeming feature of a lot of things. ._.;;

... But sweet, somebody read it. =D

Posted by: Feral Phoenix Sep 7 2007, 12:08 PM

:DDD Am so reading and reviewing this as soon as I get the chance. X333

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Read. And. ILU. This was such a well-thought-out AU; you are as much win as you ever were. *hugs*